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College
Application Essays |
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Each
year, admission officers must reject thousands of applications from prospective
students. Consequently, students have realized that to distinguish themselves
from huge applicant pools, they must ensure that every aspect of their application
is of the highest standard. Perhaps the most important document in the entire
application package is the essay or personal statement.
Admission
committees expect that the applicant has spent many months writing and
rewriting his or her essay, and thus, they expect a perfect document.
Even a small error in grammar or punctuation can lead to the dismissal
of your application. These problems are even greater for non-native English
speakers who may not realize that their application has a fatal flaw.
Students
who choose to have their essay edited by a professional editor can significantly
increase the chance that they will be accepted by the university of their
choice. Our experienced editors have the skills that can turn an ordinary
essay into an extraordinary essay.
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Here
is an example: |
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(The
original document is in red,
and the revised document is in blue): |
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An
excerpt from a graduate business school application essay: |
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Original:
Since very young age growing in Hong Kong, I am looking at the many
tall towers and think that I want to run large international businesses
like the men in the towers. I grow up very poor and work very hard
for my educated life. My mother always tell me to work hard and study
hard and I will become big success. I am not yet there, but I feel
that I am coming. I have great respect for your world-famous program.
The people of Hong Kong will recognize it immediately when they hear
that I am a graduate and this will help me to realize my childhood
dreaming. |
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Edited:
Since early childhood, I have dreamed of a career in business. Growing
up in Hong Kong, I watched the businesspeople going to their offices
in the magnificent towers, and I knew that I wanted to be a part of
their world.
Because
my family had few monetary resources, I grew up in an atmosphere
that encouraged hard work and academic excellence as a way to improve
our station in life. As a university graduate, I believe that I
have moved closer to where I want to be. However, an MBA from a
prestigious institution like yours can help me realize my ultimate
dream to one day take my place in the gleaming office towers of
Hong Kong.
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